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Forum: Fiction 03-31-2013, 11:42 AM
Replies: 4
Views: 851
Posted By AbdulaOblongata
Rabbit, Whew! You've left ME with a daunting...

Rabbit,
Whew! You've left ME with a daunting challenge to be sure! Having established history changed is like a temporal Gordian knot that I may not be able to unravel ... GOOD FOR YOU!!

My next...
Forum: Fiction 03-27-2013, 08:37 AM
Replies: 1
Views: 427
Posted By AbdulaOblongata
Rooster, MAN, I'm gettin' weepy all over again....

Rooster,
MAN, I'm gettin' weepy all over again. The Hulkinator has that waaay ...you know!?

God help us, we might have to bring the team back to life, hope the Brits take Bubbles' new accent...
Forum: Fiction 03-27-2013, 08:09 AM
Replies: 8
Views: 1,379
Posted By AbdulaOblongata
Rabbit, Actually, I usually do stand-alone...

Rabbit,
Actually, I usually do stand-alone stories. I started out here at WB with a series to get my bearings but eventually branched out with individual pieces.

The ATT and others were...
Forum: Fiction 03-26-2013, 06:16 PM
Replies: 2
Views: 467
Posted By AbdulaOblongata
Blonde, Very slick, very real! Your style of...

Blonde,
Very slick, very real! Your style of writing kept me engaged to the end.

I think that what I liked most about this piece was that it didn't require any great epiphany or triumphant...
Forum: Fiction 03-26-2013, 05:48 PM
Replies: 13
Views: 1,104
Posted By AbdulaOblongata
Rooster, Jeez man, it was like reading this for...

Rooster,
Jeez man, it was like reading this for the first time. I think I'm going to have to go back to the WN blog and reacquaint myself with the plucky temporal misfits.

Regarding Rabbit ......
Forum: Fiction 03-26-2013, 05:19 PM
Replies: 8
Views: 1,379
Posted By AbdulaOblongata
Rabbit, I love it! The writing and tempo kept...

Rabbit,
I love it! The writing and tempo kept me engaged and ever interested in what happened next.

I couldn't tell by the intro whether this is an ongoing series or not. Can we expect a...
Forum: Fiction 03-26-2013, 09:09 AM
Replies: 5
Views: 581
Posted By AbdulaOblongata
Rabbit, Thanks for the review! Ref: Your...

Rabbit,
Thanks for the review!
Ref: Your Signature- Maybe THAT'S what separates us from the animals, our propensity for mental mating!

I'm glad you enjoyed this segment of our leap into...
Forum: Fiction 03-24-2013, 01:23 PM
Replies: 5
Views: 581
Posted By AbdulaOblongata
Bucket, Thanks for the read and the good words....

Bucket,
Thanks for the read and the good words. ATT was an exercise at thinking and writing on the fly, you take up where the previous writer left off and then run with it.

Though the premise...
Forum: Fiction 03-24-2013, 01:07 PM
Replies: 2
Views: 988
Posted By AbdulaOblongata
Bucket, I see that you have refined your...

Bucket,
I see that you have refined your technique in my absence. Though I can't say that I am a fan of the style, objectively speaking, I'd say that you've developed it to a more succint and tight...
Forum: Fiction 03-24-2013, 12:40 PM
Replies: 8
Views: 1,003
Posted By AbdulaOblongata
Th1s, Your storytelling abilities seem to be...

Th1s,
Your storytelling abilities seem to be rather solid and the plotline is quite plausible.

I might work on the confrontation scene at the office however. In order for the "Boss" to maintain...
Forum: Fiction 03-23-2013, 08:19 PM
Replies: 5
Views: 581
Posted By AbdulaOblongata
Icon10 ATT 3 Rectum, Nearly Kilt 'em

Writer's Beatniks: This is part three of a joint-effort WriterNation story authored by Rooster Smith, Jim Liston and myself.

Without spilling too many beans, Joan of Arc and Hulk Hogan have...
Forum: Fiction 03-23-2013, 07:42 PM
Replies: 4
Views: 519
Posted By AbdulaOblongata
auerrotts, Wow, that was a bit of a Jekyll and...

auerrotts,
Wow, that was a bit of a Jekyll and Hyde character introduction! I'm assuming that you shifted from 3rd to 1st person for a certain effect, bold move if presented in the right context.
...
Forum: Fiction 03-23-2013, 07:13 PM
Replies: 1
Views: 532
Posted By AbdulaOblongata
Wind, The concept here is interesting and the...

Wind,
The concept here is interesting and the delivery shows an appealing style but I would recommend that you withhold the identity of the "first person" ( so to speak ), until near the end.
...
Forum: Fiction 02-03-2013, 10:13 PM
Replies: 9
Views: 931
Posted By AbdulaOblongata
Rooster, Great episode! I hate that Rob is gone...

Rooster,
Great episode! I hate that Rob is gone ...well, kinda gone, but I love the story!

The closing was the best in my opinion though the fight scene was quite well executed. KAl's concern...
Forum: Fiction 02-03-2013, 09:13 PM
Replies: 6
Views: 1,078
Posted By AbdulaOblongata
MiMo, Another nice episode. You're giving a...

MiMo,
Another nice episode. You're giving a really good delivery with each segment, giving a mini-conclusion to satisfy the reader then leaving us to look forward to the next chapter with a...
Forum: Fiction 02-02-2013, 08:49 PM
Replies: 4
Views: 951
Posted By AbdulaOblongata
Bucket, I can't say whether it's the fact that...

Bucket,
I can't say whether it's the fact that you've moved into the character interaction or that you've just tightened up the stylization, but this flows quite nicely.

The side references...
Forum: Fiction 02-02-2013, 08:27 PM
Replies: 18
Views: 1,255
Posted By AbdulaOblongata
Judith, It's as hard to comment on a story like...

Judith,
It's as hard to comment on a story like this as it is to offer condolences to the bereaved of which it speaks.

You conveyed the sentiment well and concisely and though you might find my...
Forum: Fiction 02-02-2013, 08:10 PM
Replies: 8
Views: 762
Posted By AbdulaOblongata
Rooster, Everything's moving so hard and fast,...

Rooster,
Everything's moving so hard and fast, I almost had to reach into the archives to find this.

There's a lot of nice action in this one. I think you're getting a good balance between fast...
Forum: Fiction 01-30-2013, 09:55 PM
Replies: 13
Views: 1,285
Posted By AbdulaOblongata
Lyndia, Bear in mind, the lack of bridges...

Lyndia,
Bear in mind, the lack of bridges aren't deal-breakers for the reader but they can enhance the experience greatly because they bolster story fluidity.


Here's an example:
"While one...
Forum: Fiction 01-30-2013, 09:33 PM
Replies: 8
Views: 974
Posted By AbdulaOblongata
Rooster, Sorry that I missed this, things are...

Rooster,
Sorry that I missed this, things are moving so fast on the forum lately or maybe I'm just moving slower. I hit the AwesomeV posting first so I'm tapped out again but I wanted to stop by...
Forum: Fiction 01-30-2013, 09:23 PM
Replies: 8
Views: 1,378
Posted By AbdulaOblongata
MiMo, This was a great episode in that you...

MiMo,
This was a great episode in that you explored a lot of tasty details and nuances of cyborgian life.

Brags' tactical approach to display conformity by assuming the classic soldier's...
Forum: Fiction 01-29-2013, 12:55 AM
Replies: 14
Views: 1,412
Posted By AbdulaOblongata
Rooster, I'm a bit tapped out from my extensive...

Rooster,
I'm a bit tapped out from my extensive review on AwesomeV so I just wanted to ask about this repeated punctuation glitch(?).

...“‘Come now...- I'm wondering whether you might have a...
Forum: Fiction 01-27-2013, 08:48 PM
Replies: 12
Views: 791
Posted By AbdulaOblongata
Jigalow, With skills like that, I can't see how...

Jigalow,
With skills like that, I can't see how Bill Wallace could have lost!

...a loud gas giver, as Rob liked to call them...- I like to call 'em "verbally flatulent" but that's me

Apart...
Forum: Fiction 01-27-2013, 08:22 PM
Replies: 13
Views: 1,285
Posted By AbdulaOblongata
Lyndia, There are a lot of interesting elements...

Lyndia,
There are a lot of interesting elements here, certainly enough to keep the reader's attention. The intentional vagueness makes sense as a vehicle to hook the reader into coming back,...
Forum: Fiction 01-26-2013, 05:03 PM
Replies: 8
Views: 1,065
Posted By AbdulaOblongata
MiMo, And the thick plottens! Good to...

MiMo,
And the thick plottens!

Good to know that Kat is finally aware that the Brag-ster lives.

See you on the next,
Abdula
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