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Forum: Poetry 12-23-2014, 06:45 PM
Replies: 7
Views: 924
Posted By poe
Beautiful imagery. I think you could do without...

Beautiful imagery. I think you could do without the'"or", that opens the 3rd stanza. Perhaps you could say,"soft tapping on the deep carpet (of) footfalls..", at the end of stanza #3. ...
Forum: Poetry 10-16-2014, 09:36 AM
Replies: 0
Views: 316
Posted By poe
Infatuation, edit 10/16/14

Flutter, flutter, you are the utter
romance of the breath.
A fibrillation of intent upon your object,
heaven sent:
beauty in its pure incantation.

Flutter, flutter,
a trembled breath......
Forum: Poetry 10-16-2014, 04:16 AM
Replies: 7
Views: 593
Posted By poe
At first glance, It is beautifully written. I...

At first glance, It is beautifully written. I will re-read it ffor more comments.
Shalom
Forum: Poetry 10-04-2014, 11:36 AM
Replies: 4
Views: 457
Posted By poe
Wreckless

I live in a wreckless void where
faces grow on trees and
down where the roots eat soil.
In my mind I bury my toes in her cool black earth.
I smell the fragrant dirt where
autumns sweet apples...
Forum: Poetry 09-11-2014, 07:08 AM
Replies: 12
Views: 1,090
Posted By poe
Greggie, you if anyone must know how much it...

Greggie, you if anyone must know how much it means for a writer to see those words. Thank You!
poe
Forum: Poetry 09-11-2014, 07:06 AM
Replies: 12
Views: 1,090
Posted By poe
A string is a string is a string, I am the 5th...

A string is a string is a string, I am the 5th string
Forum: Poetry 09-05-2014, 11:14 AM
Replies: 12
Views: 1,090
Posted By poe
Hi Susan, In answer to you query, no, there is...

Hi Susan,
In answer to you query, no, there is no significance to the 5th string. I took a chance with that one, as I have little if any familiarity with the harp. I did take cello lessons when I...
Forum: Poetry 09-05-2014, 11:00 AM
Replies: 25
Views: 1,673
Posted By poe
I like how the poem progresses like a short story...

I like how the poem progresses like a short story with a beginning, middle and end. I am particularly fond of stanza's 1, and, 3.
Good read!
Forum: Poetry 09-05-2014, 10:48 AM
Replies: 27
Views: 1,617
Posted By poe
A really enjoyable read. Your images are spot-on...

A really enjoyable read. Your images are spot-on all through. Loved the name, Janky. I saw it all, I was there. Only word I hope you'll agree to rework is "schizophrenic". Mental diagnoses are a...
Forum: Poetry 09-02-2014, 07:28 PM
Replies: 12
Views: 1,090
Posted By poe
Thank you, IDrew. Its an honor. p

Thank you, IDrew. Its an honor.
p
Forum: Non-Fiction 09-02-2014, 02:10 PM
Replies: 18
Views: 3,513
Posted By poe
I like the piece. Only thing that bugged me(yes,...

I like the piece. Only thing that bugged me(yes, pun intended)is the idea that you know what the bugger is thinking, or that it "knows" a particular thing. Only time we can know what something or...
Forum: Poetry 09-02-2014, 01:39 PM
Replies: 12
Views: 1,090
Posted By poe
Thank you, AnaisNin!

Thank you, AnaisNin!
Forum: Poetry 09-02-2014, 11:39 AM
Replies: 3
Views: 656
Posted By poe
I like that you used the girl's/woman's name in...

I like that you used the girl's/woman's name in the poem/title. Its an homage to a certain person as opposed to an homage to romance. I liked the "musty mattress", for me a very convincing image...
Forum: Poetry 09-02-2014, 11:17 AM
Replies: 12
Views: 1,090
Posted By poe
Sleep

Through a diaphanous flue

I slip upward

into the fuzzy air,

floating towards enticing whispers,

past a slipping silhouette of
Forum: Poetry 09-01-2014, 07:17 AM
Replies: 2
Views: 538
Posted By poe
Your poem has a quality convincing the reader of...

Your poem has a quality convincing the reader of your sincerity, even passion regarding this theme, "the Word". For me, truly a worthy theme. S1 introduces your premise, and S's2, and 3, continue...
Forum: Poetry 08-29-2014, 03:53 PM
Replies: 0
Views: 825
Posted By poe
Jack's Mustache

Jack's Moustache

(Written for Jack Hirschman, wise man, poet, and
regular of North Beach, San Fransisco.)

I left a man in a bed of blue sheets,(the
Glacial tips of Greenland's hoary frost)....
Forum: Non-Fiction 08-25-2014, 04:58 PM
Replies: 3
Views: 1,384
Posted By poe
Thank you Pandora! And many happy...

Thank you Pandora! And many happy (birthday)returns to you!
Forum: Poetry 08-24-2014, 02:23 PM
Replies: 0
Views: 679
Posted By poe
Soul Juice

(for Lazer)


What turns me on is soul juice.
No, I don't need no excuse.
Some people think that I'm just loose.
To love you is my greatest truth.
They try to break us up, but
Its no use.
As...
Forum: Poetry 08-24-2014, 02:16 PM
Replies: 7
Views: 695
Posted By poe
Nice piece. Liked L's 13 thru 20. 21 an' 22 too.

Nice piece. Liked L's 13 thru 20. 21 an' 22 too.
Forum: Poetry 08-24-2014, 02:10 PM
Replies: 1
Views: 526
Posted By poe
Interesting piece. Its a yes, like. Esp. L7

Interesting piece. Its a yes, like. Esp. L7
Forum: Poetry 08-24-2014, 02:07 PM
Replies: 2
Views: 511
Posted By poe
Nice structure. And it still works as a poem on...

Nice structure. And it still works as a poem on its own.
Nice read.
Forum: Poetry 08-20-2014, 09:23 AM
Replies: 6
Views: 708
Posted By poe
I like this piece. It's like a heavy duty...

I like this piece. It's like a heavy duty allegory for a very intimate and disturbing feeling. I'd take out the "like the Poltergeist movie", line. Your ability to convey a feeling is way too...
Forum: Poetry 08-20-2014, 09:17 AM
Replies: 4
Views: 526
Posted By poe
Thank you so much, Lmc71775. p

Thank you so much, Lmc71775.
p
Forum: Poetry 08-19-2014, 10:24 AM
Replies: 4
Views: 526
Posted By poe
Riven

Riven


It came again; Hwhomp(!),
a wind, hands down
then cupped over
my pulled breath.
Hardly a sound, but a thunder
claps your back,
unwitting, shocked and flawed you
Forum: Poetry 08-19-2014, 10:20 AM
Replies: 6
Views: 696
Posted By poe
Funny, I'm decidedly "Anti-Fart" as poetry goes,...

Funny, I'm decidedly "Anti-Fart" as poetry goes, but here it resonated(no pun intended) a mood and was ok.
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