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Forum: The Notice Board 08-01-2007, 06:09 PM
Replies: 55
Views: 4,809
Posted By poetnurse
VIP Membership

If the goodwill is still available, I'd like a membership also...am I too late, I know I don't show up often but my heart is with you. poetnurse
Forum: Poetry 02-16-2007, 10:13 PM
Replies: 8
Views: 933
Posted By poetnurse
Blue Heron

Thank you so much for your understanding about the imagery and how vital the circuling back was to the value of the poem . This was so key. I appreciate your critique. Nanci
Forum: Poetry 02-16-2007, 10:05 PM
Replies: 7
Views: 1,090
Posted By poetnurse
Last Words

Thanks guys, sometime I rhink they are. N
Forum: Poetry 02-16-2007, 10:00 PM
Replies: 8
Views: 1,106
Posted By poetnurse
Up In Michigan

A Utopia in our Minds...is it not just so grand? Wonderful imagery and it allows your audience a chance also to escape. I think with some tightening this could be more than it is. Nanci
Forum: Poetry 02-13-2007, 07:37 AM
Replies: 8
Views: 933
Posted By poetnurse
Kal, The heron metaphor is comparing the thinning...

Kal, The heron metaphor is comparing the thinning river, whose rock bed is showing, to an emaciated person...I can see the redundancy in some of what you have highlighted. My purpose of this poem...
Forum: Poetry 02-13-2007, 07:10 AM
Replies: 8
Views: 933
Posted By poetnurse
Thanks Gary for your helpful suggestions and I...

Thanks Gary for your helpful suggestions and I have worked on this poem since summer, so I shall look into working "motionless"in. BTW congrats on your win. Have missed the site, looks good. ...
Forum: Writers' Cafe 02-13-2007, 04:56 AM
Replies: 7
Views: 723
Posted By poetnurse
I am sorry about your friend. I have not been...

I am sorry about your friend. I have not been around very much, and I am toying with the idea of not writing, but then I get an urge, a metaphor will pop into my head and my coattails are broad flat...
Forum: Poetry 02-12-2007, 08:38 PM
Replies: 8
Views: 933
Posted By poetnurse
August and The Blue Heron

August and The Blue Heron


The blue heron stands still as death
nothing moving.
The lone sentry on a boulder
guards the craggy ribs
of a thinning river
while the eye of Heaven
swallows...
Forum: Poetry 02-12-2007, 08:36 PM
Replies: 4
Views: 748
Posted By poetnurse
Thanks Riverstone, This is most helpful. I...

Thanks Riverstone, This is most helpful. I should have changed that format, I wrote this as a Double Ethere and forgot to change it in the computer. Your comments and help gave me a stronger poem....
Forum: Poetry 02-12-2007, 06:35 PM
Replies: 15
Views: 1,164
Posted By poetnurse
This is very poignant in content, touches the...

This is very poignant in content, touches the core of ones spirit. Very well done. :) poetnurse
Forum: Poetry 02-12-2007, 06:29 PM
Replies: 4
Views: 748
Posted By poetnurse
Finding Love

Gray
clouds hung
low, puckered
and pouting as
snow fell in the thin
air. She saw a figure
bent low, moving slowly, a
dot against the bleak horizon.
Tree arms with icy sleeves embrace the...
Forum: Poetry 02-12-2007, 06:16 PM
Replies: 7
Views: 1,090
Posted By poetnurse
Thank you for your helpful review, I have not...

Thank you for your helpful review, I have not been around very much as I am my mother's caregiver and she has had a few ups and downs of late. I have laid my pen aside and just have not felt to...
Forum: Poetry 11-28-2006, 04:14 AM
Replies: 7
Views: 1,203
Posted By poetnurse
Well done, good rhythm and keeping the theme and...

Well done, good rhythm and keeping the theme and metaphors consistent, it is nice to read something that is not wandering all over the place. Sad relationships have to "sink" to such levels, but oft...
Forum: Poetry 10-29-2006, 11:05 AM
Replies: 9
Views: 876
Posted By poetnurse
Polite is wonderfully written, good imagery as I...

Polite is wonderfully written, good imagery as I can see the deliberate smile, the blood splattered arms, and heading home. Oops, the same smile reserved for them. Nicely done, now that is an...
Forum: Poetry 10-29-2006, 10:43 AM
Replies: 4
Views: 751
Posted By poetnurse
Gary, Just browsing around and stumbled upon...

Gary, Just browsing around and stumbled upon this, the sentiment touches my heart. It is amazing that indeed they do listen, even when you think they don't. Very enjoyable poem for me. poetnurse
Forum: Poetry 10-29-2006, 10:36 AM
Replies: 3
Fly
Views: 771
Posted By poetnurse
Strong in its message, gentle is the love shown. ...

Strong in its message, gentle is the love shown. Ah, to keep them safe and protected, but all fledglings come to that moment in time, to fly...beauitfully written and one that I shall come back to...
Forum: Poetry 10-29-2006, 10:25 AM
Replies: 6
Views: 790
Posted By poetnurse
Bleedingheart, yes I totally delight in words,...

Bleedingheart, yes I totally delight in words, often I dream of words, parading across my mind, carrying standards and playing drums, it is all such fun. A teacher I had for a class really drove the...
Forum: Poetry 10-29-2006, 10:21 AM
Replies: 4
Views: 754
Posted By poetnurse
Riverwriter I do so muchly appreciate your time...

Riverwriter I do so muchly appreciate your time and review, you have given me food for thought as I had not thought before about changing the ending, but, you may be right. It is understated, but I...
Forum: Poetry 10-29-2006, 10:17 AM
Replies: 4
Views: 754
Posted By poetnurse
Bleeding heart thank you for your very kind...

Bleeding heart thank you for your very kind review and its too late for he loves me loves me not...poetnurse
Forum: Poetry 10-29-2006, 10:15 AM
Replies: 7
Views: 893
Posted By poetnurse
Riverwriter, I appreciate the critique, but I did...

Riverwriter, I appreciate the critique, but I did not pen The First Beach, but I am sure Andrew will glean from your helpful insights. poetnurse
Forum: Poetry 10-28-2006, 01:04 PM
Replies: 7
Views: 893
Posted By poetnurse
I truly enjoyed your thought processes and you...

I truly enjoyed your thought processes and you have some wonderful metaphors just floating around. Just structure this and tighten your thoughts and this would be more than awesome. poetnurse
Forum: Poetry 10-28-2006, 12:54 PM
Replies: 4
Views: 754
Posted By poetnurse
Streams of Remembrance

Late August
I sit and
watch the
seamless river
as fainting gusts
of wind ripple
stilled water.

Birds rustle
with the wind
Forum: Poetry 10-27-2006, 08:57 AM
Replies: 6
Views: 790
Posted By poetnurse
I must say thanks again, I have a couple of...

I must say thanks again, I have a couple of questions if you don't mind...where do I find info regarding pencil points, rep power, etc. I guess I am confused a little, and I see that not many folk...
Forum: Poetry 10-27-2006, 08:04 AM
Replies: 2
Views: 788
Posted By poetnurse
I love anything romantic, and this is fresh in...

I love anything romantic, and this is fresh in its feeling, but I do agree with Gary about your "telling", line two does indeed provide some imagery. Your poem conveys a feeling and that is a good...
Forum: Poetry 10-27-2006, 07:46 AM
Replies: 6
Views: 790
Posted By poetnurse
Thanks for the input, and I totally agree. I had...

Thanks for the input, and I totally agree. I had it in my computer this way and due to laziness I did not change it, I appreciate your candor. Nanci (poetnurse)
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