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Forum: The Intellectual Table 06-10-2018, 04:58 PM
Replies: 6
Views: 431
Posted By Palindrome
I've had five or six lives, three of which...

I've had five or six lives, three of which involved building or remodelling houses, so I picked up a few DIY skills. Very basic carpentry and electric wiring. I'm good at painting, papering, daubing...
Forum: Writers' Cafe 06-10-2018, 04:42 PM
Replies: 17
Views: 1,201
Posted By Palindrome
What are the rules?

What are the rules?
Forum: The Intellectual Table 05-13-2018, 08:41 PM
Replies: 13
Views: 748
Posted By Palindrome
I watch it all the time. For the past 40 or so...

I watch it all the time.
For the past 40 or so years, I've been following cultural trends, changes in language, advertising trends, racial relations, gender relations, politics, science,...
Forum: Free Writing 04-25-2018, 12:35 PM
Replies: 2
Views: 845
Posted By Palindrome
Me all thinks this is terrific. So he put on our...

Me all thinks this is terrific. So he put on our editor hat for the fine detailing.


You could have made a little more of the image "struck"; the reader almost expects a psychic slap or punch,...
Forum: Poetry 04-16-2018, 03:59 PM
Replies: 4
Views: 680
Posted By Palindrome
Good imagery. I like the floral theme; it's...

Good imagery. I like the floral theme; it's consistent, gently melancholy and in harmony with the ending.
I'd lose the second stanza: the softener is a bit jarring, and the verse doesn't really add...
Forum: Writers' Cafe 04-01-2018, 06:11 AM
Replies: 57
Views: 2,729
Posted By Palindrome
As Jesus said to the apostles this morning: Go...

As Jesus said to the apostles this morning:
Go ahead and tell! Who's going to believe you?
Forum: Writers' Cafe 03-31-2018, 07:50 PM
Replies: 57
Views: 2,729
Posted By Palindrome
Why would you have expected them to? Everybody...

Why would you have expected them to? Everybody writes now - in fact, I believe the number of authors equals the number of readers, as of 2016. Judging by the material I've had to edit and review,...
Forum: Writers' Cafe 03-30-2018, 08:10 PM
Replies: 57
Views: 2,729
Posted By Palindrome
Sorry. It started out okay, but there are too...

Sorry. It started out okay, but there are too many number sequences.
I hate number sequences.
Forum: Poetry 03-29-2018, 06:05 AM
Replies: 8
Views: 560
Posted By Palindrome
If you see three spiders in your bathroom, there...

If you see three spiders in your bathroom, there are actually seven.
(But no mosquitoes!)
Forum: Non-Fiction 03-28-2018, 12:58 PM
Replies: 3
Views: 683
Posted By Palindrome
The best defence against a man with a bad...

The best defence against a man with a bad attitude is a man with a good attitude.
Forum: Poetry 03-28-2018, 11:56 AM
Replies: 8
Views: 560
Posted By Palindrome
I really liked this opening: (though you...

I really liked this opening:

(though you don't need to capitalize a new line in the middle of a sentence, and it would be okay to have a period after 'you': a dash after a comma makes no sense.)...
Forum: Free Writing 03-27-2018, 07:12 PM
Replies: 6
Views: 794
Posted By Palindrome
Once my eyes get better, I will read again.

Once my eyes get better, I will read again.
Forum: Poetry 03-27-2018, 07:11 PM
Replies: 3
Views: 346
Posted By Palindrome
Looking forward to it!

Looking forward to it!
Forum: Free Writing 03-27-2018, 10:32 AM
Replies: 6
Views: 794
Posted By Palindrome
"God's in the bottle" is a good start. I'd like...

"God's in the bottle" is a good start. I'd like to see every stanza start with "God's in"...

"heaven sent" means that it come from heaven; you might change it to mean it's rising toward heaven.
...
Forum: Writers' Cafe 03-27-2018, 10:16 AM
Replies: 4
Views: 1,251
Posted By Palindrome
I'm from the other parish.

I'm from the other parish.
Forum: Poetry 03-27-2018, 06:58 AM
Replies: 3
Views: 346
Posted By Palindrome
Love the main body - the positive part; what it's...

Love the main body - the positive part; what it's about.
Wouldn't change a thing there.
I do have some trouble with the first, negative, part:
It seems a little inconsistent to me.

This would...
Forum: Writers' Cafe 03-21-2018, 04:56 PM
Replies: 6
Views: 1,487
Posted By Palindrome
I lost two. The best short-short story {flash...

I lost two. The best short-short story {flash fiction hadn't been invented yet; that's how old I am) was in Grade 12 and I'm pretty sure my teacher kept it, since it was not in the folder I got back...
Forum: Free Writing 02-23-2018, 07:06 PM
Replies: 36
Views: 1,381
Posted By Palindrome
It's already good. Just sayin it could be even...

It's already good. Just sayin it could be even better.

No, not at all. I only said that I would believe it's possible, but not probable. If you made it a little more relatable, believing would be...
Forum: Free Writing 02-23-2018, 09:35 AM
Replies: 36
Views: 1,381
Posted By Palindrome
That's not very clear in the story, either. ...

That's not very clear in the story, either.

A rumour - no particulars. No suggestion of john having learned combat skills.

If you say it's a true story, I'll believe you, because unusual...
Forum: Writing Help & Issues 02-22-2018, 03:48 PM
Replies: 8
Views: 2,765
Posted By Palindrome
Start with where they are when first introduced....

Start with where they are when first introduced. What's their situation and mental state at this point?

Then, decide where they must be at the end of the story. Will their situation be very...
Forum: Free Writing 02-22-2018, 03:38 PM
Replies: 36
Views: 1,381
Posted By Palindrome
The administration did - and that's the...

The administration did - and that's the intentional irony of the piece. They saw him as crazy because of the violence he committed - while his victim only intended violence and didn't get a chance to...
Forum: Free Writing 02-22-2018, 03:32 PM
Replies: 36
Views: 1,381
Posted By Palindrome
The administration did - and that's the...

The administration did - and that's the intentional irony of the piece. They saw him as crazy because of the violence he committed - while his victim only intended violence and didn't get a chance to...
Forum: Free Writing 02-22-2018, 03:23 PM
Replies: 36
Views: 1,381
Posted By Palindrome
That sounds ... er... reads very much as if the...

That sounds ... er... reads very much as if the rifle-toting kid is standing in the doorway, facing inward, with the rifle ahead of him, pointing into the room. How do you glide up to his side...
Forum: Fiction 02-21-2018, 02:23 PM
Replies: 7
Views: 1,096
Posted By Palindrome
It's a little gem. The descriptions are...

It's a little gem. The descriptions are wonderfully evocative.
"birdstudded smile" is particularly good.
I especially like the birds on the wire bracketing the memory.
Forum: Free Writing 02-21-2018, 01:22 PM
Replies: 36
Views: 1,381
Posted By Palindrome
It's not true. It's not even plausible. ...

It's not true. It's not even plausible.
Nobody's crazy enough to walk into a gun-barrel with a pencil. Even if one kid were, he'd be dead before he got to the door, never mind through it and behind...
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