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Forum: Fiction 10-04-2011, 08:59 AM
Replies: 10
Views: 1,086
Posted By eez
I'd like to thank you all for your comments and...

I'd like to thank you all for your comments and they are very much appreciated.

Again, thank you.
Forum: Fiction 10-02-2011, 08:03 AM
Replies: 10
Views: 1,086
Posted By eez
Inklogic, You're right. I guess I was...

Inklogic,

You're right. I guess I was trying to reinforce the formality that was around between people at the time of the First World War, but, yeah, it's over the top.

Thanks for your...
Forum: Fiction 10-02-2011, 06:42 AM
Replies: 10
Views: 1,086
Posted By eez
The Beauty of War (700 words)

I'd merely like to know how you feel after reading this.



James put his glass down and turned to Charles. “On the whole, I have decided that war is best avoided.”

Charles poured himself...
Forum: Fiction 09-24-2011, 11:48 PM
Replies: 7
Views: 970
Posted By eez
Very good. Completely agree that the ending...

Very good.

Completely agree that the ending just isn't working as it should and is letting down the rest of the work, but, as MMB admits, what needs to be done?

It's always a tricky one.
...
Forum: Fiction 09-17-2011, 12:30 AM
Replies: 22
Views: 3,542
Posted By eez
TD, I wholeheartedly apologize for the way...

TD,

I wholeheartedly apologize for the way my comment came across.

To clarify, I was unable to read any further mainly because the good lady, a retired grammar teacher, was sitting next to me...
Forum: Fiction 09-16-2011, 08:12 AM
Replies: 22
Views: 3,542
Posted By eez
TaxDance, I have to say that I have a...

TaxDance,

I have to say that I have a problem with your comments on this work.

Having looked at the first citation you have used, I felt unable to read further.

I would suggest/agree that...
Forum: Fiction 09-13-2011, 08:27 AM
Replies: 13
Views: 4,332
Posted By eez
Hilee, It would be pointless if I were to...

Hilee,

It would be pointless if I were to in any way criticise this work: your grasp and understanding of grammar is far better than mine.

I can't help thinking that others who have commented...
Forum: Fiction 09-12-2011, 08:19 AM
Replies: 21
Views: 1,808
Posted By eez
I love this forum! So much variety and...

I love this forum!

So much variety and differing styles of writing and different subject matter!

jimr, does your work contain faults? Well, of course it does. I've yet to write anything that...
Forum: Fiction 09-06-2011, 06:32 AM
Replies: 4
Views: 8,600
Posted By eez
Nadja, thank you. And I'm so glad Three Men in a...

Nadja, thank you. And I'm so glad Three Men in a Boat is one of your favourite books. I gave an old copy of the book to someone who was visiting from Canada; she now considers it to be a prize...
Forum: Fiction 09-05-2011, 08:59 AM
Replies: 4
Views: 8,600
Posted By eez
A wasted Journey? (short story/500 words)

The following was something I just fancied writing and thought that as I haven't put a story up for some time, I'd, well, put it up. Do you like it? Only wrote it thirty minutes ago and haven't had...
Forum: Fiction 09-04-2011, 05:55 AM
Replies: 22
Views: 3,542
Posted By eez
Rabbit, I rather liked this piece. There...

Rabbit, I rather liked this piece.

There are things that don't work too well, such as: 'It’s a dank corner of a bad bar in a metropolis unknown to its neighbors.'

For me something like this...
Forum: Fiction 09-03-2011, 06:52 AM
Replies: 13
Views: 1,778
Posted By eez
Rabbit, A critic's opinion is exactly that;...

Rabbit,

A critic's opinion is exactly that; nobody elses, just their view on something.

Read the work again.

I have no idea who Lmc is, but I would think he or she is a more than...
Forum: Fiction 09-03-2011, 12:06 AM
Replies: 13
Views: 1,778
Posted By eez
Sorry, Lmc, I must refuse your request. It's...

Sorry, Lmc, I must refuse your request. It's nothing personal; it's just something I never do.

To be honest, there are others on this forum far better than I who I'm sure would help.

Hilee...
Forum: Members' Choice 09-02-2011, 08:40 AM
Replies: 16
Views: 9,225
Posted By eez
Another nomination from me: ...

Another nomination from me:

http://www.writersbeat.com/showthread.php?t=33544

The werewolf Ate My Homework.

Sublime.
Forum: Fiction 09-02-2011, 08:36 AM
Replies: 13
Views: 1,778
Posted By eez
I am becoming very impressed with some of the...

I am becoming very impressed with some of the works on this forum.

By my reckoning this piece is less than 700 words--I haven't counted, simply can't be bothered--but it knocks the shite out of...
Forum: Fiction 08-31-2011, 12:30 AM
Replies: 12
Views: 1,063
Posted By eez
Nadja, Who'd have thought a story about a...

Nadja,

Who'd have thought a story about a person's 'problems' and issues with plants--plants of all things!--could be so enjoyable?

I can't believe I'm actually replying on such a work!
...
Forum: Fiction 08-22-2011, 07:45 AM
Replies: 21
Views: 1,890
Posted By eez
Waterpoor, I think it works very well. Most...

Waterpoor,

I think it works very well. Most enjoyable.

Are you Mark Twain?

eez
Forum: Fiction 08-20-2011, 12:02 AM
Replies: 13
Views: 1,822
Posted By eez
Entrancing, captivating and beautiful. I...

Entrancing, captivating and beautiful.

I read it several times last night with a glass of my favourite single malt whisky. The bottle only comes out when I'm in the best of moods--my doctor tells...
Forum: Fiction 08-09-2011, 08:37 AM
Replies: 31
Views: 3,831
Posted By eez
Grace, To be honest, there are, for me, a...

Grace,

To be honest, there are, for me, a few tense issues:

'I willed him to stay downstairs. I was happy to find him in the morning, blissfully unconscious on the sofa.'

'I willed him to...
Forum: Fiction 08-08-2011, 01:21 AM
Replies: 17
Views: 2,039
Posted By eez
Harsh, brutal, outstanding. Perfect.

Harsh, brutal, outstanding. Perfect.
Forum: Fiction 08-03-2011, 08:04 AM
Replies: 8
Views: 1,229
Posted By eez
Okay, you're trying to write a book. As with all...

Okay, you're trying to write a book. As with all manuscripts, a certain amount of words is required. However, don't look at the 'amount' of words required as a target.

Trust me, once you get into...
Forum: Fiction 07-28-2011, 07:48 AM
Replies: 26
Views: 3,956
Posted By eez
Sorry, but It's not flawless (just the usual...

Sorry, but It's not flawless (just the usual grammar, spelling, punctuation etc). Written works rarely are, though.

The content and accuracy of the content is outstanding...almost too real to...
Forum: Fiction 07-26-2011, 11:55 PM
Replies: 20
Views: 1,433
Posted By eez
Second version vastly better. The other members...

Second version vastly better. The other members were right; the reader is now guided throught the conversation with ease.

However, I found the very last sentence--which I'm sure should be at...
Forum: Fiction 07-23-2011, 08:23 AM
Replies: 2
Views: 598
Posted By eez
Okay, this needs a serious rewrite. ...

Okay, this needs a serious rewrite.

Firstly, another cracker of a short story.

Secondly, grammar, paragraphing and spelling do not do justice to the tale--send HileeCoco a private message and...
Forum: Non-Fiction 07-22-2011, 08:50 AM
Replies: 53
Views: 14,125
Posted By eez
'I know that people disagree with me on this one;...

'I know that people disagree with me on this one; I know a lot of people here on this site are religious, but I am sorry. I am not going to suck up to something i have doubt in believing. Don't let...
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