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Forum: Poetry 04-03-2007, 10:10 PM
Replies: 6
She
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Posted By Toyzrock
Thanks C7

Thanks C7
Forum: Poetry 04-03-2007, 10:08 PM
Replies: 10
Views: 863
Posted By Toyzrock
Gary, Nice job here (as usual). I'm just going to...

Gary, Nice job here (as usual). I'm just going to offer a small suggestion. On this line: "for people in the pews" maybe "within the pews" or something like that would flow better.
Forum: Poetry 04-02-2007, 04:08 AM
Replies: 6
She
Views: 600
Posted By Toyzrock
Thanks Kit! I like it the way it is. Just simple.

Thanks Kit! I like it the way it is. Just simple.
Forum: Poetry 04-01-2007, 01:34 AM
Replies: 9
Views: 681
Posted By Toyzrock
The oddity of it makes it cool. I love the last...

The oddity of it makes it cool. I love the last line.
Forum: Poetry 04-01-2007, 01:23 AM
Replies: 6
She
Views: 600
Posted By Toyzrock
She

She called
She came
She knew
She listened
She felt
She loved
She refrained...
She left with me
inside Her brain --
Forum: Poetry 03-31-2007, 03:21 AM
Replies: 6
Views: 663
Posted By Toyzrock
Nice job Trip. I like Riverstones suggestions....

Nice job Trip. I like Riverstones suggestions. Really a nice break from our typical ramblings. It's a sweet poem.
Forum: Poetry 03-31-2007, 03:14 AM
Replies: 8
Views: 893
Posted By Toyzrock
Gary, I liked it. The only thing that I would...

Gary, I liked it. The only thing that I would even consider changing is this line:

golden liquid heaven. maybe "liquified heaven?"
Forum: Poetry 03-31-2007, 02:59 AM
Replies: 28
Views: 1,190
Posted By Toyzrock
Very deep. Being a minimalist at heart, I enjoyed...

Very deep. Being a minimalist at heart, I enjoyed this read. I'll take a stab at the content. "Paraphrased" Some pervert is trying to (and does ) take advantage of a young girl. Are we on the same...
Forum: Poetry 03-26-2007, 02:21 AM
Replies: 6
Views: 657
Posted By Toyzrock
This is awesome, and here is my favorite...

This is awesome, and here is my favorite line..."beautiful wispy words
that gently dissolved in the soft breeze." Very nice!
Forum: Poetry 03-26-2007, 02:14 AM
Replies: 7
Views: 736
Posted By Toyzrock
C7, Well done!

C7, Well done!
Forum: Poetry 03-26-2007, 02:10 AM
Replies: 11
Views: 733
Posted By Toyzrock
Now i'm dating myself, but if anybody knows the...

Now i'm dating myself, but if anybody knows the lyrics to "All the lonely people" by the Beatles...The Father Mckenzie reference brings a whole new and super creative way of having a poem within a...
Forum: Poetry 03-23-2007, 02:34 PM
Replies: 9
Views: 727
Posted By Toyzrock
I found the opposite true on this one Kit, minus...

I found the opposite true on this one Kit, minus the great editing. It made me feel like a kid narrated by an adult.
Forum: Poetry 03-23-2007, 10:58 AM
Replies: 8
Views: 706
Posted By Toyzrock
Thanks Gary...let me see what I can do .

Thanks Gary...let me see what I can do .
Forum: Poetry 03-23-2007, 03:15 AM
Replies: 8
Views: 706
Posted By Toyzrock
Thanks to you!

Thanks to you!
Forum: Poetry 03-22-2007, 11:10 PM
Replies: 8
Views: 706
Posted By Toyzrock
Excellent! Kit, Thanks for taking the time to...

Excellent! Kit, Thanks for taking the time to edit this, and I hope that you feel better.
Forum: The Notice Board 03-21-2007, 05:17 AM
Replies: 32
Views: 2,873
Posted By Toyzrock
I agree in a different way to Chuchulain. Doesn't...

I agree in a different way to Chuchulain. Doesn't it make sense to have the members vote on the competitions? I have a hard time agreeing with a person that has "Critic" as their signature line. We...
Forum: Poetry 03-21-2007, 04:56 AM
Replies: 9
Views: 727
Posted By Toyzrock
Glad to help...you have helped me a lot!

Glad to help...you have helped me a lot!
Forum: Poetry 03-21-2007, 03:50 AM
Replies: 9
Views: 727
Posted By Toyzrock
Gary, I loved the poem. I would consider one...

Gary, I loved the poem. I would consider one line: "as many times as he wants." might not need that one. Other than that small suggestion it was great.
Forum: Poetry 03-21-2007, 02:57 AM
Replies: 8
Views: 706
Posted By Toyzrock
Thanks L2W...I didn't see the typos, but the poem...

Thanks L2W...I didn't see the typos, but the poem isn't flowing the way I want it to anyway, but I like the idea behind the words. Any help is appreciated.
Forum: Poetry 03-20-2007, 04:41 AM
Replies: 11
Views: 1,043
Posted By Toyzrock
C7, I understand where you were going with this...

C7, I understand where you were going with this totally. Actually I know only 2 well. I think that L2W has some good fixes. You are praising and cursing the drug at the same time. I like the heart of...
Forum: Poetry 03-20-2007, 02:30 AM
Replies: 8
Views: 706
Posted By Toyzrock
Another Window

Standing at my kitchen window,
silver maples dot my neighbors lawn.
I imagine in a different space and time,
peering through another pane of glass
in a nursing home seeing birds eat a worm,
or...
Forum: Poetry 03-19-2007, 03:13 AM
Replies: 15
Views: 954
Posted By Toyzrock
Nothing earth shattering to add, or take away. I...

Nothing earth shattering to add, or take away. I thought it was excellent.
Forum: Poetry 03-19-2007, 03:05 AM
Replies: 10
Views: 806
Posted By Toyzrock
Excellent job...you are a poet! Don't be...

Excellent job...you are a poet! Don't be intimidated by "so called" poets. This is a great poem. Keep on writing.
Forum: Poetry 03-19-2007, 02:58 AM
Replies: 18
Views: 1,160
Posted By Toyzrock
Well Kit, I thought it was a great read ...too...

Well Kit, I thought it was a great read ...too many chefs spoil the soup! This was my favorite line also. in the mottled grey and black toxic sludge
Forum: Poetry 03-19-2007, 02:50 AM
Replies: 7
Views: 711
Posted By Toyzrock
Thanks Stephen

Thanks Stephen
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