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Forum: Fiction 10-14-2015, 11:57 PM
Replies: 11
Views: 1,787
Posted By eke93
really good work...i like how it flows. keep it...

really good work...i like how it flows. keep it up.
Forum: Fiction 10-14-2015, 11:28 PM
Replies: 7
Views: 852
Posted By eke93
very nice...keep writing. i enjoyed this...

very nice...keep writing. i enjoyed this...
Forum: Fiction 10-14-2015, 11:22 PM
Replies: 2
Views: 550
Posted By eke93
hi there, i must say this is one of the better...

hi there,
i must say this is one of the better ones i've seen here so far. well thought out, well written, with few errors. really nice, keep it up.

although, i feel like i must add that the...
Forum: Fiction 10-14-2015, 10:56 PM
Replies: 14
Views: 1,513
Posted By eke93
hi, i realise you already admitted that there...

hi,
i realise you already admitted that there will be grammatical errors in this. but i'll still say a few things concerning that.

first, some of it is avoidable. you seem to use the word 'that'...
Forum: Free Writing 09-16-2015, 11:32 PM
Replies: 5
Views: 755
Posted By eke93
it's quite funny. nice work. i wonder though,...

it's quite funny. nice work. i wonder though, could a brow be profoundly raised... but other than that, really beautiful.
Forum: Poetry 09-16-2015, 11:20 PM
Replies: 13
Views: 997
Posted By eke93
tor and kev....beautiful imagery. Carefully...

tor and kev....beautiful imagery. Carefully picked words. Keep writing.
Forum: Poetry 09-16-2015, 11:16 PM
Replies: 15
Views: 1,326
Posted By eke93
please chat bot I'd like to better understand...

please chat bot I'd like to better understand this piece. The title is really interesting but I couldn't really follow your thread of thought.
Forum: Free Writing 09-16-2015, 11:06 PM
Replies: 14
Views: 995
Posted By eke93
It's funny how most 'artists', if I could call us...

It's funny how most 'artists', if I could call us that, feel as jaded and tired as you've described so beautifully here. Sometimes I think we love to feel crushing depression.

Nice work though....
Forum: Fiction 09-10-2015, 06:48 AM
Replies: 7
Views: 885
Posted By eke93
There's a certain nonchalance to the entire...

There's a certain nonchalance to the entire conversation that's in my opinion, incongruous with the subjects. For example, I don't think she should use the word 'prego' at all.
And I don't know why...
Forum: Fiction 09-10-2015, 06:31 AM
Replies: 17
Views: 2,790
Posted By eke93
Sorry, I didn't read through all the comments so...

Sorry, I didn't read through all the comments so if I repeat someone else's point please ignore.

I think you should revise the words 'chide' and 'flinch'...both used to describe doug's actions in...
Forum: Fiction 09-10-2015, 06:02 AM
Replies: 7
Views: 1,037
Posted By eke93
"the rain has me near blind, and all I hear is...

"the rain has me near blind, and all I hear is the crashing rain"...in my opinion, this sentence will sound a lot better if you replaced the second 'rain'. Maybe use a different way to describe the...
Forum: Fiction 09-10-2015, 03:48 AM
Replies: 15
Views: 1,751
Posted By eke93
@poirot, noted. thank you. @prince, you're...

@poirot, noted. thank you.

@prince, you're welcome. Good luck with the rest of it. I'll be

looking forward to more posts from you.
Forum: Fiction 09-06-2015, 11:57 PM
Replies: 15
Views: 1,537
Posted By eke93
Nice work. I like the dialogue. The characters...

Nice work. I like the dialogue. The characters are well thought out too. I like that there's no physical description of anyone, or anything really. It's admirable.
Forum: Fiction 09-06-2015, 11:19 PM
Replies: 15
Views: 1,751
Posted By eke93
I understand that historical accuracy, especially...

I understand that historical accuracy, especially in the dialogue, might detract from the overall strength of your story. In fact I think you just need enough to make it passable. And yes, I meant...
Forum: Fiction 09-05-2015, 07:05 AM
Replies: 15
Views: 1,751
Posted By eke93
hi prince, i realize that this is a rough...

hi prince,
i realize that this is a rough draft. but please be careful with your dialogue. you need to flesh them out more and infuse more emotion. to give your characters and story more depth. and...
Forum: Fiction 09-05-2015, 06:52 AM
Replies: 28
Views: 2,358
Posted By eke93
I am new to writersbeat. In fact this is my first...

I am new to writersbeat. In fact this is my first comment. I read through your work and the comments that followed. I don't know if it's too late to comment but i have a couple things i would like to...
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