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Forum: Fiction 09-27-2016, 02:55 PM
Replies: 1
Views: 496
Posted By Andy Mitchell
Under Scrutiny (part 2)

Under Scrutiny part 2

On the day when he was sent down for twelve years, Callum still heard the pin drop as the old, befitted judge spoke the words: “You are the most unspeakable man in this...
Forum: Fiction 08-16-2016, 03:37 AM
Replies: 6
Views: 948
Posted By Andy Mitchell
I like this Cricket and the writing is strong...

I like this Cricket and the writing is strong apart from some of the fancy words to show about the place laden with snow. Liam is the kind of guy I'd like if I was going to meet with him in real.
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Forum: Fiction 08-05-2016, 08:14 AM
Replies: 2
Views: 502
Posted By Andy Mitchell
Under Scrutiny (part1)

A repetitive sharp shriek of a phone alarm awoke Harris from his sleep. He half-opened his eyes in a dreary semi-conscious state and reached for his phone to silence the piercing shrill of his wake...
Forum: Fiction 07-22-2016, 07:41 AM
Replies: 8
Views: 598
Posted By Andy Mitchell
Hi, this was to me a great use of "flash...

Hi, this was to me a great use of "flash fiction", and I believe it takes skill to use this type of story well. You did in my eyes. It's a sweet, aboding sight of the nightmare that is Boxing Day;...
Forum: Fiction 02-24-2016, 02:25 PM
Replies: 0
Views: 444
Posted By Andy Mitchell
The Drifter (chapter 2) (swearing)

A cold and unforgiving sensation thundered through my body, right through to my bones. It was a sobering and gut wrenching feeling that forced me onto my knees. My legs giving way to the weight of...
Forum: Fiction 09-08-2015, 03:10 PM
Replies: 1
Views: 501
Posted By Andy Mitchell
The Devil's Deceptions (Chapter 1)

Ellie Charlton sees something that a child should never see.

It’s a part of human nature that forms an act of cruelty, the obsessive part of the deranging soul that would commit such evil in a...
Forum: Fiction 05-19-2015, 03:30 PM
Replies: 2
Views: 877
Posted By Andy Mitchell
The Drifter (chapter 1) (swearing)

CHAPTER ONE.


Officer McCartney left my apartment after apologising on behalf of the New York Police Department with his ratty tail tucked tightly between his legs after accusing me of a crime I...
Forum: Fiction 02-08-2015, 01:46 PM
Replies: 3
Views: 853
Posted By Andy Mitchell
Dangerous Ground (chapter 22) (swearing)

Chapter 22


The doctor stands in front of me looking as though he is preparing to deliver a damning sentence. A feeling of dread courses over my body. Alfred Hitchcock once said “there is no...
Forum: Fiction 08-27-2014, 03:08 AM
Replies: 16
Views: 1,639
Posted By Andy Mitchell
The idea seems interesting and have promise. I...

The idea seems interesting and have promise. I like the idea but there are things to be needed to get sorted.

I didn't like the opening, as it's in passive tense. For me, the first line must...
Forum: Fiction 08-27-2014, 01:52 AM
Replies: 1
Views: 556
Posted By Andy Mitchell
Dangerous Ground (Chapter 21) (swearing)

After being alone for most of the afternoon and the only visits are from a nurse or doctor, I had a few booklets in front of me. While I am reading them I hear voices, and when I look up, I see John...
Forum: Fiction 08-27-2014, 01:51 AM
Replies: 3
Views: 671
Posted By Andy Mitchell
Dangerous Ground (Chapter 21) (swearing)

After being alone for most of the afternoon and the only visits are from a nurse or doctor, I had a few booklets in front of me. While I am reading them I hear voices, and when I look up, I see John...
Forum: Fiction 07-16-2014, 04:11 AM
Replies: 2
Views: 441
Posted By Andy Mitchell
Dangerous Ground (chapter 20)

This morning I had some test and the doctor tells me that it will take a year for me to walk again.

But now, lying in bed, I hear steps being walked and voices hit the open space, I know it's...
Forum: Fiction 04-18-2014, 05:34 AM
Replies: 1
Views: 318
Posted By Andy Mitchell
Dangerous Ground(chapter 19)

As soon as the knife comes out again, I feel my limb shudder and this is the point I just know it is done for me. I guess that my father had been right. But can't tell him now as he is resting...
Forum: Fiction 03-17-2014, 01:19 PM
Replies: 2
Views: 424
Posted By Andy Mitchell
Dangerous Ground(chapter 18) (swearing)

In the morning I didn't see Pike, who is resting in the chair and maybe wondering what has happen with his life. He must be thinking how it turns to be not so straight forward for him.

The sky,...
Forum: Fiction 03-12-2014, 11:57 AM
Replies: 0
Views: 381
Posted By Andy Mitchell
Dangerous Ground(chapter 17) (swearing)

In the basement there are bugs hanging on the walls, the tools for the trade is on the metal table and Pike is sweating. Now he wishes not to kill that poor girl.

“You don’t need to do this,...
Forum: Fiction 02-27-2014, 05:42 AM
Replies: 5
Views: 628
Posted By Andy Mitchell
Thanks for the comment. I see what you mean and I...

Thanks for the comment. I see what you mean and I have changed it.
Forum: Fiction 02-24-2014, 11:55 AM
Replies: 5
Views: 628
Posted By Andy Mitchell
Thanks for the comments that you both gave me.

Thanks for the comments that you both gave me.
Forum: Fiction 02-23-2014, 10:18 AM
Replies: 5
Views: 628
Posted By Andy Mitchell
Dangerous Ground(chapter 16) (swearing)

After lunch, I go to see the doctor, who is a female. She has blonde hair and is wearing a white coat.

“You’re ribs are just sore from the kicks by those men, Mr Porter.”

“Thank you,” I...
Forum: Fiction 02-17-2014, 07:10 AM
Replies: 1
Views: 424
Posted By Andy Mitchell
Dangerous Ground(chapter 15)

My eyes are barely open and the pain gauzes inside, the ribs bounce as I try to move. It hurts like as if a truck has hit me. I can’t speak much as it would give me more pain; even though I need to...
Forum: Fiction 02-12-2014, 01:37 PM
Replies: 3
Views: 561
Posted By Andy Mitchell
I want to thank you both for the comments, I do...

I want to thank you both for the comments, I do appreciate the suggestions.
Forum: Fiction 02-08-2014, 02:16 AM
Replies: 3
Views: 710
Posted By Andy Mitchell
Thanks for the comment and the advice, I...

Thanks for the comment and the advice, I appreciate it.
Forum: Fiction 02-05-2014, 10:13 AM
Replies: 3
Views: 561
Posted By Andy Mitchell
Dangerous Ground(chapter 14)

I woke up by the flames, as the truck has cause fire. I don’t know why it happened or who did it.

I am still lying there, as everyone else is asleep. The orange glow and the oil, which had been...
Forum: Fiction 01-30-2014, 11:56 PM
Replies: 3
Views: 710
Posted By Andy Mitchell
Dangerous Ground(chapter 13) (swearing)

After allowing the men to go pass in their big, dull-coloured truck, we judge from the few meters so that they wouldn’t fire or better yet, spot us hiding in the prickly brush. It’s like getting...
Forum: Fiction 01-27-2014, 02:58 AM
Replies: 1
Views: 482
Posted By Andy Mitchell
Dangerous Ground(chapter 12)

Though out my life with my father, I think there been plenty of mix feelings surrounding my thoughts. Many of the good things has been overshadowed with the bad things. Like his drinking, which at...
Forum: Fiction 01-18-2014, 05:06 AM
Replies: 0
Views: 413
Posted By Andy Mitchell
Dangerous Ground(chapter 11)

Through when we got there in the north, Pike and his unit are met by bullets and we are on the ridge of him. We are kneeling down fifty yards from him with our arms are out, pointing our guns....
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