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Forum: Non-Fiction 09-16-2012, 10:39 PM
Replies: 3
Views: 14,291
Posted By _zeb_
last scimester

you are not doing my homework, this was a final for 2 semesters past i did that i liked, learned a lot of new things about Walt Disney...
Forum: Non-Fiction 08-24-2012, 06:57 AM
Replies: 3
Views: 14,291
Posted By _zeb_
Icon1 Walt Disney: Sculpting the American Dream

hello all, i haven't really been on in a long time, i been in collage, but plan on being here a lot more... i will be back in 2 weeks , i glad to be back, and here is a article i did last trimester...
Forum: Previous Contests 03-26-2011, 12:18 AM
Replies: 42
Views: 8,683
Posted By _zeb_
i will be away on a trip this Sunday through all...

i will be away on a trip this Sunday through all week till next Monday...( so smtwtfssm)... i might be able to check when there but i dont know i going on trip with parents.... just to let you guys...
Forum: Previous Contests 03-20-2011, 07:50 PM
Replies: 9
Views: 3,448
Posted By _zeb_
Grandma's Song

Grandma's Song

I try to remember yet i cant,
the times we had in Vant,
holding hands, a pair we be,
you and me, close for all to see.

Yet I have no memory,
any at all for sanity,
memory...
Forum: Poetry 03-20-2011, 07:46 AM
Replies: 0
Views: 478
Posted By _zeb_
Dragons Win (Book of Dragons)

This here is the third constellation piece to http://www.writersbeat.com/showthread.php?t=29829 and http://www.writersbeat.com/showthread.php?t=30331 I would like to say this is just as good! enjoy!...
Forum: Poetry 03-18-2011, 08:12 PM
Replies: 2
Views: 721
Posted By _zeb_
ok changed... what anyone elce think?

ok changed... what anyone elce think?
Forum: Poetry 03-16-2011, 10:48 PM
Replies: 2
Views: 721
Posted By _zeb_
A Boy and Brew (Book of Dragons)

This here is the second constellation piece to http://www.writersbeat.com/showthread.php?t=29829 I would like to say this is longer, way longer really and hope you all like!

A Boy and Brew

I...
Forum: Poetry 02-17-2011, 11:16 AM
Replies: 5
Views: 824
Posted By _zeb_
probly was constellation and i think i will chage...

probly was constellation and i think i will chage it to it XD... will change to fury also XD
Forum: Poetry 02-17-2011, 10:08 AM
Replies: 5
Views: 824
Posted By _zeb_
whop wrong word there... cant think of the word i...

whop wrong word there... cant think of the word i was trying to use so I will just use series... -_- lol and it dragon poetry..... editing
Forum: Poetry 02-17-2011, 08:20 AM
Replies: 5
Views: 824
Posted By _zeb_
Compainion named Dragon (Book of dragons)

This is from a new constellation of dragon poems i working out and i will start to post up the rest to this book. Sooner or later they will be placed in order of when it happened of one went to the...
Forum: Poetry 02-17-2011, 08:07 AM
Replies: 2
Views: 827
Posted By _zeb_
hello, i liked this a lot, it had a nice flow of...

hello, i liked this a lot, it had a nice flow of words to it. i don't see any mistakes on my end so cant give much a critique, some would not like some of the language but i dont seem to care... good...
Forum: Poetry 02-17-2011, 08:00 AM
Replies: 2
Views: 492
Posted By _zeb_
hello! this line is the only off line i seen,...

hello! this line is the only off line i seen, maybe make both one line? might be little longer but would flow better, the rest of the lines flowed well and i liked this a lot.
Forum: Poetry 02-17-2011, 07:56 AM
Replies: 1
Views: 598
Posted By _zeb_
hello! liked this a lot and noticed how it...

hello! liked this a lot and noticed how it flowed... only thing i could see is punctuation... a comma or period, whatever feels better... it separates and shows the next stanza. Hope that would work,...
Forum: Poetry 02-16-2011, 10:56 PM
Replies: 1
Views: 474
Posted By _zeb_
You and Me

Hello all, _zeb_ here... been in collage since the new year and busy a lot... gonna try and make time again to get into writing again... i got little work to show but here one made... glad to be back...
Forum: Poetry 11-15-2010, 12:09 PM
Replies: 1
Views: 519
Posted By _zeb_
Day of joy

the trumpet calls for one and all
to leave there beds of clay and soil,
and watery graves in ocean deep,
or fields of war where hero's sleep.
Though not to labor as before,
but to new life...
Forum: Lyrics 02-11-2010, 09:19 AM
Replies: 1
Views: 609
Posted By _zeb_
nice rhyming all the way till end except beginig...

nice rhyming all the way till end except beginig first 2 stanzas have with me as the rhyme, the 3rd to last word does do difrint and rhyme but none of the other work does that...

other than that...
Forum: Lyrics 02-09-2010, 03:11 PM
Replies: 2
Views: 674
Posted By _zeb_
Icon14 very nice song but i cant pass 1 stanza of...

very nice song but i cant pass 1 stanza of line....



the two likes in that one area throws it off a bit... i would eliminate the first one preferably, it sounds better...

other than that...
Forum: Lyrics 02-08-2010, 01:39 PM
Replies: 2
Views: 738
Posted By _zeb_
that lyric turned out good and i could almost...

that lyric turned out good and i could almost hear the music just by reading it!.... when it up post it up so we can hear it... best of times...

Sake
Forum: Lyrics 02-06-2010, 01:56 PM
Replies: 0
Views: 749
Posted By _zeb_
Thirteen Love-Song

Thirteen Love-Song

As i dream i can see,
what i really want to be,
a father to kids of my own,

You would think i would say,
a legend for all to hear,
maybe someone for all to look up to.
Forum: Lyrics 02-06-2010, 01:49 PM
Replies: 1
Views: 687
Posted By _zeb_
you did well with this, you could work on the...

you did well with this, you could work on the spacing, and the periods and comas, felt like it stopped when it was continuing at some parts, or visa versa... the meaning was set and let out but i see...
Forum: Lyrics 01-31-2010, 07:02 PM
Replies: 3
Views: 838
Posted By _zeb_
Icon14 Well tounge is spelt tongue and everythings might...

Well tounge is spelt tongue and everythings might look better as everything’s…decievers is spelt deceivers….
i liked this allot... reminded me of a rap/hard rock beat mix... you could rhyme a little...
Forum: Lyrics 01-31-2010, 06:49 PM
Replies: 9
Views: 1,599
Posted By _zeb_
liked this allot and hope to see more!!!

liked this allot and hope to see more!!!
Forum: Lyrics 01-31-2010, 06:47 PM
Replies: 2
Views: 698
Posted By _zeb_
Icon14 i liked this allot and noted the Consonance was...

i liked this allot and noted the Consonance was flowing good in the verses... bravo!
Forum: Lyrics 01-31-2010, 06:43 PM
Replies: 5
Views: 815
Posted By _zeb_
i like it allot it had a nice formation also

i like it allot it had a nice formation also
Forum: Poetry 01-31-2010, 06:36 PM
Replies: 9
Views: 1,036
Posted By _zeb_
i liked this allot and you painted this world...

i liked this allot and you painted this world greatly!... very imaginative and somehow after reading all it rhymed in the end to a point ... nothing wrong that i see good job
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