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Forum: Poetry 11-20-2011, 03:09 AM
Replies: 6
Views: 669
Posted By AbbyBlack
I quite like how W rearranged it. When I began...

I quite like how W rearranged it. When I began reading it I wasn't too fond of it but as it went on it actually really grew on me... And your conclusion is just spot - on. I think some things could...
Forum: Poetry 11-20-2011, 03:05 AM
Replies: 2
Views: 464
Posted By AbbyBlack
The Greatest Truth In Life

The Greatest Truth Of Life Your Parents Donít Tell You When Youíre Young Even Though They Really Should and Accepting It In Old Age Is Too Late As You Have Already Wasted All Your Life Struggling...
Forum: Poetry 11-13-2011, 08:42 AM
Replies: 10
Views: 798
Posted By AbbyBlack
I get the feeling fine. It seems to me that it...

I get the feeling fine. It seems to me that it may be native american philosophy inspired, but with a preference for knowledge over money rather than nature over money.
But
you have a very...
Forum: Poetry 11-13-2011, 08:34 AM
Replies: 6
Views: 583
Posted By AbbyBlack
Not at all, actually. I didn't know about the...

Not at all, actually. I didn't know about the article you mentioned, then again, I only get The Guardian sometimes.

But yes, the general idea is advice to my younger self, I'm glad you got that...
Forum: Poetry 11-11-2011, 10:45 AM
Replies: 10
Views: 798
Posted By AbbyBlack
I am pretty sure money is singular, but I may be...

I am pretty sure money is singular, but I may be wrong...
Forum: Poetry 11-10-2011, 10:02 AM
Replies: 4
Views: 510
Posted By AbbyBlack
'Things' is merely a figure a speech in this...

'Things' is merely a figure a speech in this case. Objects, events, presence = things.
Forum: Poetry 11-10-2011, 08:06 AM
Replies: 4
Views: 510
Posted By AbbyBlack
Hmmm. I see what you were trying to do (or...

Hmmm.
I see what you were trying to do (or did, I do not want go come across as derogatory), but it doesn't appeal to me, personally. I think there are other, more effective ways to put across the...
Forum: Poetry 11-10-2011, 08:02 AM
Replies: 7
Views: 643
Posted By AbbyBlack
I agree that at times it's a little bit obvious,...

I agree that at times it's a little bit obvious, and if you left a little bit more to the imagination, as they say... but I'm a big fan of narration through lack of thereof, so I am biased. At the...
Forum: Poetry 11-10-2011, 07:57 AM
Replies: 4
Views: 492
Posted By AbbyBlack
I like it. Somehow reminescent of Charles...

I like it. Somehow reminescent of Charles Bukowski's short poems... I think you could just call it 'disclaimer' though and let us think about the meaning. Otherwise, intriguing.
Forum: Poetry 11-10-2011, 07:51 AM
Replies: 6
Views: 583
Posted By AbbyBlack
Wow. I don't know if I deserve such comparisons...

Wow. I don't know if I deserve such comparisons or such praise, but thanks nevertheless. Some of your points I agreed with, some I thought about but at the end didn't adapt to because some of what...
Forum: Poetry 11-09-2011, 02:15 PM
Replies: 6
Views: 583
Posted By AbbyBlack
Reprise

(Don't know how I feel about this. Includes a quotation from Brian Friel's Translations.)


You will make mistakes and you will
learn from them. You are
young. Life will have its way with you....
Forum: Poetry 11-09-2011, 02:13 PM
Replies: 18
Views: 1,322
Posted By AbbyBlack
I felt it was very banal at the start but it...

I felt it was very banal at the start but it picked up so much towards the end; I really liked the post-modernist thing you did where you acknowledged your own writing within a poem. But overall I...
Forum: Poetry 11-09-2011, 02:11 PM
Replies: 9
Views: 721
Posted By AbbyBlack
I loved the phrase 'catastrophic prom'. The...

I loved the phrase 'catastrophic prom'. The juxtaposition of the pathos of the situation and the silliness of it... you addressed the problem of the psychoanalytical culture, where we blame stupid...
Forum: Poetry 11-05-2011, 04:44 AM
Replies: 4
Views: 471
Posted By AbbyBlack
Thank you both : ) It mean a lot to me when...

Thank you both : ) It mean a lot to me when people respond to my work.

Phyllis, I think the greatest thing in poetry is that it's a bit like human sexuality: no two people are the same in the way...
Forum: Poetry 11-02-2011, 06:33 AM
Replies: 4
Views: 471
Posted By AbbyBlack
A Caller From Nowhere

The man was a caller from nowhere. Again,
I see you on evenings of joyful trespassing,
you never see me quite the same way. And you can tell
I’m a phony smoker because
I need your help;...
Forum: Poetry 03-19-2011, 03:56 AM
Replies: 0
Views: 529
Posted By AbbyBlack
Odette By The Lake

Hey everyone : ).
I'm just drafting a new poem and was wondering if anyone could tell me if this works as the last verse:


Father, that I do love myself more than my sister
And more than...
Forum: Fiction 03-17-2011, 09:50 AM
Replies: 15
Views: 1,258
Posted By AbbyBlack
Right you are. This was written a while ago and I...

Right you are. This was written a while ago and I still sometimes struggle with trying to say too much in one sentence. I edited it and broke up a lot of sentences, it really was necessary. Thanks a...
Forum: Fiction 03-11-2011, 03:21 AM
Replies: 4
Views: 649
Posted By AbbyBlack
In terms of originality this still looks a lot...

In terms of originality this still looks a lot like your typical teenager adventure book to me. But then again, maybe it isn't all that bad. There's a large market for those, especially since modern...
Forum: Fiction 03-11-2011, 03:19 AM
Replies: 7
Views: 876
Posted By AbbyBlack
I can honestly say the title interested me, I'm...

I can honestly say the title interested me, I'm just not sure whether that first impression is negative/positive. There is a HUGE fad for zombies and zombie related stories at the moment. So by...
Forum: Fiction 03-10-2011, 01:37 PM
Replies: 4
Views: 649
Posted By AbbyBlack
Why hello again, some cmments of mine: ...

Why hello again,

some cmments of mine:



Don't really see how that's necessary.
Forum: Fiction 03-10-2011, 01:17 PM
Replies: 19
Views: 1,040
Posted By AbbyBlack
Gee, calm down. (And Eragon is a rip off Star...

Gee, calm down. (And Eragon is a rip off Star Wars, actually : p.)

I'll happily read some more of your work, but for a conclusion of this wonderful debate, let me say this: 90 % of fantasy books...
Forum: Fiction 03-10-2011, 10:30 AM
Replies: 19
Views: 1,040
Posted By AbbyBlack
I think our times have proved many times that you...

I think our times have proved many times that you don't need any originality whatsoever to be succesfull - for some it's enough that you add a twist such as a sparkling vampire.

Still, if I were...
Forum: Fiction 03-10-2011, 10:22 AM
Replies: 8
Views: 1,054
Posted By AbbyBlack
If anything, I was getting at people I had such...

If anything, I was getting at people I had such experiences with (imagine being called a lesbian for 2 years after doing one essay on gay rights - yeah, I love my old catholic school), but not at...
Forum: Fiction 03-10-2011, 02:08 AM
Replies: 8
Views: 1,054
Posted By AbbyBlack
I dare to disagree. Only if the reader is...

I dare to disagree. Only if the reader is superficial enough to asume something ever so tedious and simple. Just because I may write, with great realism and expertise, about suicide, does not mean I...
Forum: Fiction 03-10-2011, 01:56 AM
Replies: 19
Views: 1,040
Posted By AbbyBlack
Your language is definitely gramatically correct...

Your language is definitely gramatically correct and quite good in terms of structure, too, so that's always good. Certainly there's some potential becaue you're not starting from scratch, you know...
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