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Forum: Publishing 12-15-2007, 05:33 PM
Replies: 30
Views: 2,922
Posted By Mr Baatard
Poe, I actually took a break from...

Poe,

I actually took a break from submissions for a while. Between a death in the family and a possible deployment, my attention was elsewhere. I plan to try again in January. I'll post my...
Forum: Fiction 11-10-2007, 04:44 PM
Replies: 13
Views: 1,496
Posted By Mr Baatard
Thanks! I wanted to write something light and...

Thanks! I wanted to write something light and endearing with a simple plot. Maybe I did put too much emphasis on Corman, though. Think I should write her out?
Forum: Fiction 11-05-2007, 04:09 PM
Replies: 13
Views: 1,496
Posted By Mr Baatard
I doubt it. But maybe the next story will use...

I doubt it. But maybe the next story will use one of them as a model.

I'm thinking that Tiffany Corman was involved somehow with Lily Krieger from Wretched Creature. I don't know, I think I...
Forum: Fiction 11-05-2007, 02:45 PM
Replies: 13
Views: 1,496
Posted By Mr Baatard
In fact there are three! I have two Pugs and a...

In fact there are three! I have two Pugs and a toy Poodle. The younger Pug, Elvis, was the model for Puppy. That dog loves me, and vice versa.
Forum: Fiction 11-05-2007, 02:44 PM
Replies: 13
Views: 1,496
Posted By Mr Baatard
Thanks for commenting. I'm glad you liked it! ...

Thanks for commenting. I'm glad you liked it!

Tiffany's disappearing act was designed to lend some mystery to Puppy's telepathic abilities. She was not meant to be an important character as much...
Forum: Fiction 11-05-2007, 05:05 AM
Replies: 13
Views: 1,496
Posted By Mr Baatard
That's what I get for being in a rush to post! ...

That's what I get for being in a rush to post! You were absolutely right in your critique. I usually scrutinize my stuff more before posting it, but I enjoyed this piece and was in a hurry to get...
Forum: Fiction 11-04-2007, 06:43 PM
Replies: 13
Views: 1,496
Posted By Mr Baatard
Puppy

About 2600 words. Enjoy!

Puppy.

The woman who answered the door startled Carl Gerard. A mess of curly hair crowned a round face with ruddy cheeks, thin lips and piercing eyes. Hers was a...
Forum: Fiction 11-02-2007, 04:52 AM
Replies: 15
Views: 1,351
Posted By Mr Baatard
I agree!

I agree!
Forum: Fiction 10-31-2007, 04:51 PM
Replies: 6
Views: 1,003
Posted By Mr Baatard
That was creepy! It was written well, but...

That was creepy! It was written well, but creepy. It's confusing at the end, but that actually works well for it. I don't think it's supposed to make sense. I think it's supposed to be bizarre...
Forum: Fiction 10-30-2007, 09:25 AM
Replies: 4
Views: 548
Posted By Mr Baatard
Live and learn. That's why we're here!

Live and learn. That's why we're here!
Forum: Fiction 10-30-2007, 02:19 AM
Replies: 4
Views: 548
Posted By Mr Baatard
Okay first of all, hi and welcome to WB! Now...

Okay first of all, hi and welcome to WB!

Now for the crit. You have the potential to be a pretty good storyteller, but nobody will take you seriously until you improve your SPAG (Spelling,...
Forum: Fiction 10-24-2007, 04:11 PM
Replies: 9
Views: 758
Posted By Mr Baatard
Still good stuff! Now we're into some real plot...

Still good stuff! Now we're into some real plot development. Even though you have many characters, you balance them well and manage to keep plot progression relatively simple.

It's only...
Forum: Fiction 10-24-2007, 01:36 AM
Replies: 15
Views: 1,351
Posted By Mr Baatard
I only have time for a quick critique, but it was...

I only have time for a quick critique, but it was fun to read. You have a great opening. It is very reminiscent of a Rod Serling delivery. It reads well and grabs the reader's attention.

I...
Forum: Publishing 10-23-2007, 05:19 PM
Replies: 30
Views: 2,922
Posted By Mr Baatard
Thanks you two! Definitely mentioning you in the...

Thanks you two! Definitely mentioning you in the acknowledgments. One more question. Which hook is better?

A. Immortals can't live normal lives, but that's all Spanner Tenganden wants.

B....
Forum: Publishing 10-20-2007, 02:28 PM
Replies: 30
Views: 2,922
Posted By Mr Baatard
So how's this query letter?

I've tweaked it a bit. What do you think?


Dear Agent's name:

Spanner Tenganden is an immortal with supernatural powers, though all he wants is an ordinary life. Wandering through lonely...
Forum: The Notice Board 10-20-2007, 02:17 PM
Replies: 7
Views: 1,311
Posted By Mr Baatard
I see I'm in the minority here. I use the front...

I see I'm in the minority here. I use the front page. What's new, who's featured, etc. Let's me know at a glance what's news on WB when I'm not here to hit you all up for advice.

Daniel, move...
Forum: Fiction 10-19-2007, 01:14 AM
Replies: 10
Views: 865
Posted By Mr Baatard
Wow this is pretty good! Great visuals and...

Wow this is pretty good! Great visuals and descriptions, both in the environment and within the main character. Nice little twist there at the end for flavor. Not the most original twist, but it...
Forum: Fiction 10-17-2007, 05:44 PM
Replies: 2
Views: 1,096
Posted By Mr Baatard
Hi! Well it's entertaining, if not a bit...

Hi! Well it's entertaining, if not a bit confusing. That is to say it's enjoyable to read, but it's disjointed.

You had a good opening. I could imagine a parent telling a child a bedtime...
Forum: The Notice Board 10-16-2007, 02:54 PM
Replies: 29
Views: 2,560
Posted By Mr Baatard
Okay, I cast my vote. Good luck to all the...

Okay, I cast my vote. Good luck to all the nominees!
Forum: Publishing 10-07-2007, 05:53 AM
Replies: 30
Views: 2,922
Posted By Mr Baatard
Okay then, what are those magazines? I remember...

Okay then, what are those magazines? I remember reading that there was more of a market for fantasy in the UK than there was here.

I picked up the '08 Writer's market to find out which agents...
Forum: Publishing 10-06-2007, 05:27 PM
Replies: 30
Views: 2,922
Posted By Mr Baatard
I appreciate the input from everyone! So now...

I appreciate the input from everyone! So now that I'm up to seven rejections, how long should I wait to resubmit? All of the rejections state that my book is not something they're interested in at...
Forum: Writing Help & Issues 09-30-2007, 05:43 PM
Replies: 9
Views: 1,694
Posted By Mr Baatard
I think Gothe works pretty well with those names....

I think Gothe works pretty well with those names. Gothe or Goethe (pronounced the same).
Forum: Publishing 09-26-2007, 09:14 AM
Replies: 30
Views: 2,922
Posted By Mr Baatard
I've bookmarked it as well. Thanks!

I've bookmarked it as well. Thanks!
Forum: Writer's Beat Quarterly 09-24-2007, 05:33 PM
Replies: 9
Views: 6,588
Posted By Mr Baatard
Icarus, Did you get my submission? Not sure...

Icarus,

Did you get my submission? Not sure if that's what you're looking for...
Forum: Poetry 09-19-2007, 02:18 AM
Replies: 10
Views: 1,011
Posted By Mr Baatard
Nice little piece about getting caught up in a...

Nice little piece about getting caught up in a rainbow. I look up at the sky and daydream about flying through and around clouds, or I'll be mesmerised by a sunset. You caught that feeling of awe. ...
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