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Forum: Poetry 02-28-2016, 06:13 AM
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Views: 845
Posted By Lon Palmer
Fine. I resign.

Fine.

I resign.
Forum: Poetry 02-28-2016, 05:31 AM
Replies: 6
Views: 630
Posted By Lon Palmer
Yes, I have to admit that does clarify and thus...

Yes, I have to admit that does clarify and thus improve it, but consider this: the fact that one person totally understood this, even before your corrections, and another didn't, shows that people...
Forum: Poetry 02-27-2016, 08:46 PM
Replies: 8
Views: 845
Posted By Lon Palmer
Wow, that's just breathtaking!

Wow, that's just breathtaking!
Forum: Poetry 02-27-2016, 03:36 PM
Replies: 15
Views: 921
Posted By Lon Palmer
And here I thought you were being intentionally...

And here I thought you were being intentionally (and brilliantly) ironic. (You could have used that as an alibi, you know.)
Forum: Poetry 02-27-2016, 03:32 PM
Replies: 6
Views: 630
Posted By Lon Palmer
That's one of us. I get it up until about...

That's one of us.

I get it up until about halfway through where, for me, it starts to wobble, then keel over because of the emphasis on sound over sense, twisting the latter to serve the former.
Forum: Poetry 02-27-2016, 03:30 PM
Replies: 3
Views: 402
Posted By Lon Palmer
Interesting parallelism reinforced by rhyme.

Interesting parallelism reinforced by rhyme.
Forum: Poetry 02-27-2016, 03:29 PM
Replies: 15
Views: 921
Posted By Lon Palmer
"Shone". Shone is for emitting light (which...

"Shone".

Shone is for emitting light (which you used, metaphorically: "I think your talent has shone through in this piece," comparing a person's talent to a light); "shined" is for causing...
Forum: Poetry 02-27-2016, 02:54 PM
Replies: 15
Views: 921
Posted By Lon Palmer
Correct usage: The sun shone as he shined his...

Correct usage: The sun shone as he shined his shoes.

Errors have crept into common usage in our increasingly illiterate age, usually "shined" when "shone" should be used, but more rarely the...
Forum: Poetry 02-26-2016, 03:59 PM
Replies: 32
Views: 1,224
Posted By Lon Palmer
Anyone reading this will make up his own mind. ...

Anyone reading this will make up his own mind.

I'm content with that.
Forum: Poetry 02-26-2016, 03:44 PM
Replies: 32
Views: 1,224
Posted By Lon Palmer
Pathetic.

Pathetic.
Forum: Poetry 02-26-2016, 02:48 PM
Replies: 32
Views: 1,224
Posted By Lon Palmer
I don't know what you're on about. I can only...

I don't know what you're on about. I can only tell you what happened. And I'm sure that Googling "tuning" and any number of singers would bring up lots of hits, especially if you chose a pitchy...
Forum: Poetry 02-26-2016, 11:29 AM
Replies: 32
Views: 1,224
Posted By Lon Palmer
To be clear: the opinion came first; the...

To be clear: the opinion came first; the documentation was dug up in order to demonstrate that it was neither "laughable" nor "weird" seeing as it was shared by others, including some industry people.
Forum: Poetry 02-26-2016, 09:18 AM
Replies: 32
Views: 1,224
Posted By Lon Palmer
I have no desire to continue the discussion, but...

I have no desire to continue the discussion, but for the innocent bystander (who may be doubting my credibility at this point), I offer the following excerpts as samples of internet articles and...
Forum: Poetry 02-25-2016, 07:25 PM
Replies: 32
Views: 1,224
Posted By Lon Palmer
Some of her solo stuff is noticeably pitchy, but...

Some of her solo stuff is noticeably pitchy, but not in a bothersome way, which is why I used her as an example, to contrast with the pitchyness in your recording, which did bother me. I have no...
Forum: Poetry 02-25-2016, 06:27 PM
Replies: 32
Views: 1,224
Posted By Lon Palmer
Obviously you're not interested in my feedback,...

Obviously you're not interested in my feedback, so I will keep it to myself in the future.
Forum: Poetry 02-25-2016, 05:52 PM
Replies: 32
Views: 1,224
Posted By Lon Palmer
I gave it another quick listen. The vocals are...

I gave it another quick listen. The vocals are really out of tune. If you disagree, that's fine, but calling someone's honest reaction to your material "weird" and "laughable" just tells me not to...
Forum: Poetry 02-25-2016, 04:45 PM
Replies: 32
Views: 1,224
Posted By Lon Palmer
Then I suggest that you open them up in autotune....

Then I suggest that you open them up in autotune. They're really out of tune.



That's quite a reaction to my comments. They were honest and informed, whether you agree with them or not, and...
Forum: Poetry 02-25-2016, 02:50 PM
Replies: 32
Views: 1,224
Posted By Lon Palmer
I'm going to be really harsh. The verses...

I'm going to be really harsh.

The verses were okay, but repetitive.

I, too, would like to see a chorus.

I liked the guitars.

The drum intro was pointless.
Forum: Poetry 02-25-2016, 12:40 PM
Replies: 4
Views: 599
Posted By Lon Palmer
I would like to see what you come up with and...

I would like to see what you come up with and comment/suggest further.

In the meantime:


Across
time,
tide and rhyme,
mineral minds
are assigned
Forum: Poetry 02-25-2016, 11:27 AM
Replies: 5
Views: 565
Posted By Lon Palmer
I think your explanation needs an explanation.

I think your explanation needs an explanation.
Forum: Poetry 02-25-2016, 10:52 AM
Replies: 5
Views: 565
Posted By Lon Palmer
I don't understand the ending at all.

I don't understand the ending at all.
Forum: Poetry 02-25-2016, 10:51 AM
Replies: 4
Views: 599
Posted By Lon Palmer
Do you mean something like: Across time, ...

Do you mean something like:

Across
time,
tide and rhyme,
there are minerals,
and minds
assigned
to purpose and design
the human kind.
Forum: Poetry 02-23-2016, 07:15 PM
Replies: 33
Views: 1,619
Posted By Lon Palmer
"The unexamined life is not worth living."...

"The unexamined life is not worth living." (Spoken when he chose death over exile.)
Forum: Poetry 02-23-2016, 05:00 PM
Replies: 33
Views: 1,619
Posted By Lon Palmer
You know what Socrates said . . .

You know what Socrates said . . .
Forum: Poetry 02-23-2016, 04:58 PM
Replies: 33
Views: 1,619
Posted By Lon Palmer
I am an eternal being having a temporary human...

I am an eternal being having a temporary human experience for the purpose of learning and growth of my own soul and the overall self-awareness of the universe.

I believe that without any doubt.
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