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Forum: Introductions 01-11-2018, 08:27 AM
Replies: 4
Views: 1,693
Posted By Azmacna
Hello everyone.

I've been absent for so long and I don't mean just from this forum. I used to love to go through other people's work and critique it. The reason I did that is because I found it easier to objectify...
Forum: Fiction 03-22-2015, 12:19 PM
Replies: 44
Views: 5,531
Posted By Azmacna
Ok, change of plan. I've decided to make that...

Ok, change of plan. I've decided to make that flash back a complete chapter, but I've also decided to keep the lead in as 'tick tock'. Now, my question is, if I do that, how many chapters (if it's...
Forum: Writers' Cafe 03-21-2015, 10:24 AM
Replies: 33
Views: 5,751
Posted By Azmacna
No, but I really can't be waiting until I'm in my...

No, but I really can't be waiting until I'm in my 60s to get anywhere. I want that success (if it's ever to happen) NOW, not later!
Forum: Writers' Cafe 03-21-2015, 02:25 AM
Replies: 33
Views: 5,751
Posted By Azmacna
Thanks folks. I'm very concerned about this...

Thanks folks. I'm very concerned about this though:



I'm pushing hard at this now because I feel it's my last chance to actually 'do' something with my writing. If anyone could explain exactly...
Forum: Board Games 03-18-2015, 02:14 PM
Replies: 120
Views: 20,504
Posted By Azmacna
Unzip me. Step right in.

Unzip me. Step right in.
Forum: Writers' Cafe 03-18-2015, 04:35 AM
Replies: 33
Views: 5,751
Posted By Azmacna
Is My Writing Getting Too 'Bare Boned'?

I'm not sure if this is the right section to post this. Could a mod please move it if it isn't. Thanks in advance.

I went through a spell of complete inactivity but decided enough was enough ... I...
Forum: Board Games 03-18-2015, 01:00 AM
Replies: 12,527
Views: 247,253
Posted By Azmacna
Speed

Speed
Forum: Writers' Cafe 03-17-2015, 03:23 PM
Replies: 11
Views: 1,411
Posted By Azmacna
I find writing a painful process, filled with...

I find writing a painful process, filled with feelings of inadequacy and desperation. This means that I have to write the first page over and over until I can read it and think 'that aint too bad'....
Forum: Writers' Cafe 03-14-2015, 12:29 AM
Replies: 17
Views: 1,519
Posted By Azmacna
Shy, like the word beautiful, means very little...

Shy, like the word beautiful, means very little to me. It's not specific enough. Both are handy 'placeholders' for general chat but are subjective in writing.
Forum: Fiction 03-13-2015, 08:26 AM
Replies: 44
Views: 5,531
Posted By Azmacna
Mmmmmm ... that has potential but still feels a...

Mmmmmm ... that has potential but still feels a little like I'm deliberately hiding it from the reader. It's definitely given me another possible way in though.
Forum: Fiction 03-13-2015, 06:12 AM
Replies: 44
Views: 5,531
Posted By Azmacna
Ok, so has anyone got a suggestion on how I can...

Ok, so has anyone got a suggestion on how I can avoid naming the character at the beginning of this piece? I quite like the introduction of his name at the end of section two.



That sound like...
Forum: Writers' Cafe 03-11-2015, 03:12 PM
Replies: 17
Views: 1,519
Posted By Azmacna
That's why I said 'possibly' :)

That's why I said 'possibly' :)
Forum: Fiction 03-11-2015, 02:42 PM
Replies: 44
Views: 5,531
Posted By Azmacna
It's now fully rewritten but I've not changed...

It's now fully rewritten but I've not changed much about the 'once upon a time' section, just a few words here and there and what I consider a better conclusion. Still not happy but certainly happier.
Forum: Writers' Cafe 03-10-2015, 11:57 PM
Replies: 17
Views: 1,519
Posted By Azmacna
Meek, no, timid, possibly.

Meek, no, timid, possibly.
Forum: Fiction 03-10-2015, 03:24 PM
Replies: 44
Views: 5,531
Posted By Azmacna
What about using 'canvas' and then 'brush'? Too...

What about using 'canvas' and then 'brush'? Too much? Or too vague?
Forum: Fiction 03-10-2015, 10:24 AM
Replies: 44
Views: 5,531
Posted By Azmacna
Here's a slight reworking of the opening scene....

Here's a slight reworking of the opening scene. Better or worse?

Tick. Tock.

A fat, black space pressed down on Jacob Gray as he lay frozen beneath the bed sheets, listening to the rhythm of...
Forum: Fiction 03-10-2015, 01:19 AM
Replies: 44
Views: 5,531
Posted By Azmacna
I've had a change of heart on that 'once upon a...

I've had a change of heart on that 'once upon a time' section. I think I'm going to make it more active and change the tone slightly. Perhaps start it with 'There was once a little boy' which gives...
Forum: Writers' Cafe 03-09-2015, 11:03 AM
Replies: 65
Views: 7,334
Posted By Azmacna
You should ALWAYS murder your darlings.

You should ALWAYS murder your darlings.
Forum: Fiction 03-09-2015, 12:15 AM
Replies: 44
Views: 5,531
Posted By Azmacna
Thanks risk10, I'll have a better look at this...

Thanks risk10, I'll have a better look at this when I get home from my placement.

edit: I will definitely consider most of your suggestions but that 'once upon a time' section is going to stay. I...
Forum: Writers' Cafe 03-07-2015, 01:20 PM
Replies: 18
Views: 2,410
Posted By Azmacna
I suppose I should plan but I never do. I simply...

I suppose I should plan but I never do. I simply think about what I want to write for a very long time and then start writing. I might have an idea about the characters but I tend to let the story...
Forum: Fiction 03-07-2015, 05:37 AM
Replies: 44
Views: 5,531
Posted By Azmacna
You interpreted it correctly ... So it stays! :)...

You interpreted it correctly ... So it stays! :) It is also to hint at a dull day when the sun is mostly hidden behind clouds (symbolising depression).

I'm removing 'so' because I agree with you....
Forum: Fiction 03-07-2015, 12:36 AM
Replies: 44
Views: 5,531
Posted By Azmacna
I'm currently working on the opening sentence...

I'm currently working on the opening sentence because that's all I've got time for at the moment! What do you lovely folks think of this:

Does the 'so' give it more gravitas? Or does the 'so' give...
Forum: Writers' Cafe 03-02-2015, 10:26 PM
Replies: 166
Views: 17,381
Posted By Azmacna
Could I possibly request that this conversation...

Could I possibly request that this conversation stays here and doesn't actually bleed over to threads started by 'perfect examples'. I'm not disagreeing with what you're saying (in fact I've said a...
Forum: Fiction 03-02-2015, 09:55 PM
Replies: 16
Views: 2,464
Posted By Azmacna
I find it very difficult to disagree with your...

I find it very difficult to disagree with your views on this subject but I really don't think we should be discussing things like this in the posters own thread. We have no idea what life this person...
Forum: Fiction 02-28-2015, 10:15 AM
Replies: 6
Views: 1,034
Posted By Azmacna
Ok, I'll get back to this when I have the time....

Ok, I'll get back to this when I have the time. For now:

Why write that so awkwardly when a more direct and 'active' approach is much better? What's happening here is that 'words' have become the...
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