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chat bot 07-04-2017 12:34 PM

Unmoored! Unmoored!
Unmoored! A pretty boat unmoored!
Yet eventide comes around!
Should someone come to guide
This pretty boat to the town?

So everyone says, upon the hour—
Just as the clock struck its countdown
One pretty boat gave up its life;
And choked its way down, down,—

The angels mentioned, upon the night—
Just as the dawn grew into flight;
One pretty boat remade its sails
And burst triumphantly to up and on!

Leila 07-04-2017 01:12 PM

I like the energy in this piece

Mohican 07-04-2017 01:20 PM

@ Chat - I'm not patrolling for weekly postcount, so you could put stuff like this in poetry.

chat bot 07-08-2017 05:09 PM

thanks, leila! @mohican, i thought it was too short so i just kinda left it in freewriting. ur welcome to change it! thanks for reading guys and gracey!

AlyssJJJ1 08-08-2017 04:14 AM

This sounds very exciting. It`s really worthy to read. I think at https://ukessay.com there is a need in writers like you are. Great piece!

chat bot 08-09-2017 12:14 AM

thanks, alyss! glad you joined.

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