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MaliciousFriday 05-28-2016 12:42 PM

Anybody mind reviewing my script?
 
So sometime in the future, I want to own my own television show and this is a plot-heavy cartoon show that I want to have produced. It's gonna either be called "Eyes Wide Shut" or "The Hoi Polloi". I wrote the script to the pilot episode and would like someone to read it and critique it for me.

max crash 05-28-2016 04:05 PM

renters, re-enters maybe - I got very confused.

it reads very nice, the type of story I could get into.

max crash

MaliciousFriday 05-29-2016 02:27 PM

Are you talking about when they tried going back to the cave?

max crash 05-29-2016 03:03 PM

yes

MaliciousFriday 06-02-2016 05:26 PM

Yeah, I wasn't really too sure about that part myself. I feel like I needed some type of filler so I could pace the story a little better.

MaliciousFriday 06-12-2016 06:16 PM

Giving this a little bump

clarke1557 08-29-2016 04:56 AM

It was good


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