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Nick Pierce 05-26-2017 10:32 AM

Time Travel
 
Looking back, some say it
was inevitable

The terror had shown it's hand
in so many places, each
less expected than the previous
(really, maternity wards -
retirement homes?)
that the general populace
went from numb
to inured

Gradually a new feeling of living
blossomed within the target group

The debate about what lay on the
other side of death's door lessened
then stopped

An attitude of appreciation for
each day, each other
had evolved from the
now known to be indefensible
viewpoints of pre 9/11 thought

Oh yes, the Israeli iteration
remained constant

All citizens attained arms
proficiency skills and
did their stint in the
civil service

But as the years went on and
the work opportunities for everyone
increased, aided by gratis
government training programs,
self styled recruits for
disruptive ideologies were
no longer incubating at
the former rates

And, as well equipped Eloi
mitigate marauding Morlocks,
I think to myself
"Huh, didn't see that coming"

moonpunter 05-26-2017 03:04 PM

I like poetry that rhymes.

Nick Pierce 05-26-2017 03:34 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by moonpunter (Post 732919)
I like poetry that rhymes.

air (title) by Nacia over in the Poetry section.

No, no need to thank me.

brianpatrick 05-27-2017 10:39 AM

I've always said: what we should have done after 9/11 was what the ants do when you stomp on their entrance.

Move the dead, and rebuild it.

It can't be terror if you're not terrorized.

brianpatrick 05-27-2017 10:51 AM

Your poetry comes off as you just talking to someone. Yeah, yeah, I know a lot more goes into it, but the end product is so plain-spoken.

Very good pierce.

This ones a little more 'wordy' than usual, like you had three cups of coffee instead of just the two.

New vitamins?

Myers 05-27-2017 10:53 AM

I like poetry that rhymes and is printed over nature scenes.

brianpatrick 05-27-2017 10:58 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Myers (Post 732953)
I like poetry that rhymes and is printed over nature scenes.



Hmm... wonder what Lon is doing now?

Nick Pierce 05-27-2017 12:06 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by brianpatrick (Post 732951)
I've always said: what we should have done after 9/11 was what the ants do when you stomp on their entrance.

Move the dead, and rebuild it.

It can't be terror if you're not terrorized.


Watching all the various reactions ( to the terror) I am thought provoked in a variety of directions.

This piece is one effort to get it all onto the page.

Nick Pierce 05-27-2017 12:08 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Myers (Post 732953)
I like poetry that rhymes and is printed over nature scenes.

Ha.

First I gotta teach me to resize my too big avatar pic then it's on to backgrounds.

Nick Pierce 05-27-2017 12:11 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by brianpatrick (Post 732955)
Hmm... wonder what Lon is doing now?

Did you hear about the guy who saw the ad that said "Drink Canada Dry"?

He only made it through two provinces before his liver failed.


Wonder if Lon would need me to explain this one.

Nick Pierce 05-27-2017 12:14 PM

[QUOTE=brianpatrick

New vitamins?[/QUOTE]

Muira Pauma.

Hey, you asked.

bluewpc 05-28-2017 06:41 AM

Very good piece dude

And as well equipped Eloi mitigate marauding Morlocks is definitely my favorite line. I don't think that that's what would happen but its still a great line. My bet is with the flourishing of the economy, the vacant spaces in society created by external pressures, would in fact see a trend of increasing IQs over time not drop them, logic being that the smarter people would survive long enough to reproduce and be smart enough to keep their children alive...

Nick Pierce 05-28-2017 09:56 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by bluewpc (Post 732971)
Very good piece dude

And as well equipped Eloi mitigate marauding Morlocks is definitely my favorite line. I don't think that that's what would happen but its still a great line. My bet is with the flourishing of the economy, the vacant spaces in society created by external pressures, would in fact see a trend of increasing IQs over time not drop them, logic being that the smarter people would survive long enough to reproduce and be smart enough to keep their children alive...

Mmm, logic.

Here is a film clip of how things could go if conventional logic sputters to a halt after, say, a couple of dirty bomb detonations, continuing drought and starvation in the current failed states, potable water scarcity, sea level rise of a few feet, ... okay, enough of that, let's slip into 8025 and see how the Eloi are faring having eschewn arms education.

https://youtube.com/watch?v=2KGv86vGLvXo

Nick Pierce 05-28-2017 10:01 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Nick Pierce (Post 732973)
Mmm, logic.

Here is a film clip of how things could go if conventional logic sputters to a halt after, say, a couple of dirty bomb detonations, continuing drought and starvation in the current failed states, potable water scarcity, sea level rise of a few feet, ... okay, enough of that, let's slip into 8025 and see how the Eloi are faring having eschewn arms education.

https//youtube.com/watch?v=2KGv86vGLvXo

Dunno squat about gettin' stuff to transfer.

Filterdreaming 05-31-2017 07:25 PM

Now I'm not a poet. I tend to write fiction instead. However I didn't mind this.

bluewpc 06-03-2017 10:05 AM

Alas Nick I'm in Ukraine and certain videos of youtube are deemed hazardous by the locals...

Nick Pierce 06-03-2017 04:12 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by bluewpc (Post 733062)
Alas Nick I'm in Ukraine and certain videos of youtube are deemed hazardous by the locals...



Probably for the best.
I seen some civilian drivin' vids of the natives.
Looks like they don't need no distractions.

JP_Inkswell 06-21-2017 08:45 AM

Yayah. Who needs cable when you can click on YouTube and watch the Russians driving drunk.

Nick Pierce 06-21-2017 01:55 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Nick Pierce (Post 732913)
Looking back, some say it
was inevitable

The terror had shown it's hand
in so many places, each
less expected than the previous
(really, maternity wards -
retirement homes?)
that the general populace
went from numb
to inured

Gradually a new feeling of living
blossomed within the target group

The debate about what lay on the
other side of death's door lessened
then stopped

An attitude of appreciation for
each day, each other
had evolved from the
now known to be indefensible
viewpoints of pre 9/11 thought

Oh yes, the Israeli iteration
remained constant

All citizens attained arms
proficiency skills and
did their stint in the
civil service

But as the years went on and
the work opportunities for everyone
increased, aided by gratis
government training programs,
self styled recruits for
disruptive ideologies were
no longer incubating at
the former rates

And, as well equipped Eloi
mitigate marauding Morlocks,
I think to myself
"Huh, didn't see that coming"




Hey, Mr. Pierce, is this a good example of metafiction?

Why yes, Nick. Is that how you intended it?

For the moment, old P., for the moment.

Myers 06-23-2017 03:29 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Filterdreaming (Post 733012)
However I didn't mind this.

Now that's what I call damned with faint praise.

Nick Pierce 06-23-2017 11:06 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Myers (Post 733684)
Now that's what I call damned with faint praise.


Maybe that is what passes for ecstatic Down Under.

Myers 06-23-2017 11:15 AM

Not in my experience with Down Under.

Oh -- you mean THAT Down Under.

doriswullf 09-01-2017 12:36 AM

chance
 
А good poem, you have a great chance. I see you do not have a humanitarian education because you have problems in the construction of the poem. I was the same problem and I was advised to contact one service you could try this out out they pointed out to me my mistakes. And I write a better now.

Grace Gabriel 09-01-2017 03:21 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by doriswullf (Post 736138)
А good poem, you have a great chance. I see you do not have a humanitarian education because you have problems in the construction of the poem. I was the same problem and I was advised to contact one service you could try this out out they pointed out to me my mistakes. And I write a better now.

You've brightened my day Doris - thank you.

Chinspinner 09-01-2017 02:52 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Nick Pierce (Post 732913)
Looking back, some say it
was inevitable

The terror had shown it's hand
in so many places, each
less expected than the previous
(really, maternity wards -
retirement homes?)
that the general populace
went from numb
to inured

Gradually a new feeling of living
blossomed within the target group

The debate about what lay on the
other side of death's door lessened
then stopped

An attitude of appreciation for
each day, each other
had evolved from the
now known to be indefensible
viewpoints of pre 9/11 thought

Oh yes, the Israeli iteration
remained constant

All citizens attained arms
proficiency skills and
did their stint in the
civil service

But as the years went on and
the work opportunities for everyone
increased, aided by gratis
government training programs,
self styled recruits for
disruptive ideologies were
no longer incubating at
the former rates

And, as well equipped Eloi
mitigate marauding Morlocks,
I think to myself
"Huh, didn't see that coming"

This is just stuff. It has no beginning middle and end.

Filterdreaming 09-05-2017 08:16 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Myers (Post 733684)
Now that's what I call damned with faint praise.

I do not understand

Quote:

Originally Posted by Nick Pierce (Post 733693)
Maybe that is what passes for ecstatic Down Under.

sure

Quote:

Originally Posted by Myers (Post 733694)
Not in my experience with Down Under.

Oh -- you mean THAT Down Under.

what does that mean? What is "THAT Down Under"? Am I missing something?


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